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She has left us behind
And moved on to greater
To start a new life
With all who await her
To kiss her on her flawless skin
And give welcoming embraces
The sadness that had brought her there
Withdrew from happy faces
And she may one day look upon you
The ones she knew by name
Take the sorrow from her death
And see the sunlight through the rain
- by Lady Maryam |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 05/12/2011 |
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- Title: Shiyanne
- Artist: Lady Maryam
- Description: A girl at my school who died in a car crash last year. I didn't know her but the event made me want to write something for her,
- Date: 05/12/2011
- Tags: shiyanne
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Lady Maryam - 05/13/2011
- Oh thank you ^.^
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- Dawn Aelita Madhatter12 - 05/13/2011
- sorry believable isnt the right word. um......well its more like it sounds real, it sounds like something that people would say about a loved one being dead and up in heaven watching over the people they knew and loved.
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- Dawn Aelita Madhatter12 - 05/13/2011
- i think that. it is really sad.i really like it. it sounds soooo believeable.
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- Lorkham - 05/12/2011
- Fairly impressive. Passionate, emotional, and you used real words! Also, the topic is something that strikes empathy into the souls of God knows who. However, your verse is a bit too blocky. I'd like to say, now... Frost called. He wants his pathetic style back. I just don't like the alignment of the rhymes, myself. Try something a bit more free.. Abandon the structures washed into your brain and never wrung out! Also, it would sound
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