Phony

• Artist: momodupe4714
• Description: It's what every person hates in someone no matter who you are. I made this poem for my church convention and I wanted to show you guys so enjoy! :D PLZ VOTE!
• Date: 08/03/2010
• Tags: phony sinner

Some people don't care about Christ,
or make a good sacrifice.

In a time of being in need,
all they think about is greed.

Never tells the truth,
and when in trouble tells a substitute.

New personality everyday,
they don't want to fade away.

Everyday they try to pretend,
when all they really need are some friends.

Ready to go to hell.

Comments

[SmExiiRaVeR]

I think the last sentance should be
"Ready for hell"
Nice though, gives off your opinion

[2three4]

It seems really harsh on non-believers. That's my first impression. Aside from that, it has a good two line structure, but there are much to be improved. Perhaps make one to praise God, instead of condemning those who don't share similar beliefs as you.