Is it?

• Artist: Lunicular Jester
• Description: a poem I wrote recently, it's pretty short, but alot of people say it's really good
• Date: 11/24/2009
• Tags: love sadness poem first cheese

If what I care for now
Is what you do not want
Then let me ask you why
You always like to flaunt

So when I'm sitting here alone
Slowly losing though
I'll ask you this one thing
Is it my love you really want?

Comments

[drawcula]

I don't know... the way you situated the words takes away from the feeling. Also, more descriptive words would have made it more powerful. Like, the end could be,

"I'll ask you one thing more,
is it really my love that you're looking for?"

[Sky_kisser15]

Awwwwh! that means so much! I love it! biggrin makes me think about that