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There's this girl that I am thinking of, that I love with all my heart;
She knows I'll always be here for her, even though we're far apart.
I want to pull her oh, so tight;
To my chest with all my might;
Deep into my arms;
And keep her from all harm;
And just one kiss;
One moment of pure bliss...
I tell her that I'm crazy, and wonder if I'm obsessed;
But she tells me that I'm being stupid, and she thinks that I'm the best.
I'd destroy the world for her, just to see her smile;
But giving her away, fills my mouth with bile.
Deep down I know, as long as she's happy, I am too;
Especially considering, all that we've been through.
It still makes me feel amazing, when she says "Té amó too."
This girl is my best friend;
And I'll stay by her until the end;
I just know that any man, had better treat her right;
Because I would die for her, even though I know that it's not quite right.
I wish I were a poet, or a songwriter or such,
Because I care about her, oh, so very much.
I wish I could give her something beautiful;
As beautiful as her;
But even a rose is pale next to her;
There's nothing I can give.
When I'm in, my darkest place;
She always brings a smile to my face;
Right now she is my only saving grace.
And I thank God for her, everyday.
Trying to get these thoughts, out of my head;
As I lay here, in my bed...
When you read this, 'cause I know you eventually will;
I guess I'm just saying I love you;
I miss you;
And I'm always happy for you.
<3
- by This Lame Username |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 10/04/2009 |
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- Title: Obsession and Non-Possession.
- Artist: This Lame Username
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Description:
Just thoughts that I had going through my mind, and I thought maybe writing(typing) it out would help.
It wasn't supposed to rhyme, most of it just worked out that way, and I wanted to see if it was worth any thing in a poetical nature.
Thoughtful critiques from literate people is what I'm looking for here.
Thanks for reading.
Post Script:
I apologize for the cliché and whatnot. - Date: 10/04/2009
- Tags: obsession nonpossession love blah
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Comments (5 Comments)
- Azygo - 03/30/2012
- I love you ^^
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- I Evie I - 10/08/2009
- Putting your feelings on paper is the best form of release I can find. With that being said, I hope this brings a sense of closure to you, my friend. 5/5 Very well done.
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- Azygo - 10/07/2009
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beautiful poem done by a beautiful person.
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- - Lilli nera -- - 10/06/2009
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aww so beautiful
i love it
(although i hate love poems. so this must be special when I like a love poem) - Report As Spam
- Toxic_Pinup_ - 10/06/2009
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Okay, I'm a literate poet, and I'm giving critique:
This is VERY good, while some call it "clique" and whatnot. I'll call it heartfelt and true, its great; and I'll give you 5/5. - Report As Spam