Alone Looking For The Light

• Artist: holyfire47
• Description:
• Date: 07/25/2009
• Tags: light

trapped in the dark and i walk til i find the light. so lonely looking for the light so i keep on walking in the dark. i wish had only 1 friend. so lonely looking for the light. oh my! i found the light i go into the light and i... find a friend

Comments

[Sudoku97]

I like the theme and metephorical-ness of it. But using "i" three times in a row maybe wasn't such a good idea. You should try "I... I find a friend."