You and Me

• Artist: Alkestic
• Description: this is a poem i just did i know the writing is bad but try to undertand im not perfect
• Date: 03/20/2009
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there a dark cloud over my head
there a evil river waiting for me
makin my path of darkness
i ask my self
where the light?
i cant make it
but i can ask for it
there the blood river makin his way
my heart is wisperin
"let me out"
the light is gone
im trap in this cage
when you cloy my existen
you die insade
when they are coming for me
im taking you whit me
when you give up
im taking you down
if i cant walk this earth
YOU that give me a reason
to hate
to kill
to betray
to look
you will be at my side
for the evil cloud is takin me
and you

Comments

[iinsanely Sane]

I love the poem, but if I were you, at the end I wouldn't say and you, I'd repeat the me, so I'd say for the evil cloud is taking me
me and you.
I think it would help the poem flow, but its just my opinion.

[venus in furs 66]

this poem is very good. this writer is very talented.

[Vera_lyne_03]

Scary and Frightning but Good. Very good. Keep on writing!