darkness within me

• Artist: darknessangel101276
• Description: i really hop u like that
• Date: 01/30/2009
• Tags: apeomplzread

I Never Really Knew The Truth
It's been clear, I'm done for out there,
It's been so long,I can't make it,I will and i know i will,
Die
I can fight and i know all my skills i was taught as a little girl
but i can't to many guards of the darkness all i could see out my window was
Pure Darkness ghosts of twilight out my window, only this,
and this only, could save us, (low sigh) Me Still i have every one out to get me
may be cuase im a well ill tell u that later

Comments

[NebuChi3]

"may be cuase im a well ill tell u that later"?
What does that mean?

I'm glad you put the right 'taught' in there.
Most people would put 'thought'. . .
I'll add one star to my rating.

&& put the punctuation marks next time.
I see no periods at the end of the sentences, only commas.__.

[darknessangel101276]

AND HEY I GOT HONER ROLL AT SCHOOL CAUSE OF MY GRAMMAR

[darknessangel101276]

it's my stpuied computer

[gamergurly]

It's kind'of hard to understand and the grammar isn't all that great, but it's sounds heartfelt and honest. So it's pretty good, I think. Good poem! ^_^ =)