Fly Forever

• Artist: Sasuke732
• Description:
• Date: 01/06/2009
• Tags: forever

Fly high
Higher than the sky
But will I
Will u
Words I say
Yet
Never have done

Though the sky is high
We will make it

Comments

[Fiona La Poete]

This poem is kind of sloppy, but with some revisions you could turn it into something very nice. Here are a few suggestions:

'u' needs to be you.

You might want to elaborate on some things and you could make this poem a little longer.

I really like the ending line and how you made it bold. That was a good idea.

[xretarded_muffinsx]

good job.