Writers Block

• Artist: animegirl4ever66
• Description: This is just another something I decided to write Please do not steal and please do not bag, constructive criticism is appreciated
• Date: 12/24/2008
• Tags: writers block

I tear out yet another piece of paper

I've made yet another mistake

I turn to a blank page

and pick up my pen and start writing another fake

How come my feelings don't come across whatever I make

How come my writing isn't as deep as even a shallow lake

maybe I lack feeling

maybe I haven't been through enough

maybe this isn't my thing

maybe I just suck

How come I ask questions and never get an answer

Maybe it's my disease, just my own cancer

Comments

[hikuninza]

I would only change lines 9 and 10. You changed the image from an adult worrying about the course of his/her writing to a teenager in English class. It's not bad, but it loses maturity that is prominent throughout the rest of the poem. Also, wouldn't add the first "yet." It's a mouth full. Otherwise, nice job! Good luck!

[dottie4000]

If you want to write deep look in your self to your pain to love to soul and feel free to throw criticism at yourself. Other than that don't stick to a rhyme scheme and go for a flow.

[mystery123456789]

omg this is great!!! plz rate sum of my things only its on another acount: afliction

[yuzuki_mai]

great job"...my own cancer" that's good.

[animegirl4ever66]

Thank you!

[ohmaigod]

rlly good, gj!