You scream i cry

• Artist: 3mO_kIwI_dEaTh_AnGeL_03
• Description: i dont know what i was thinking when writing this
  probibly about child abuse since theres alot of that going around
  i hope u like it
• Date: 12/22/2008
• Tags: scream

You scream i cry
Through the days that go by
Everynight is sleepless
When i see a person so helpless
Crying on the bathroom floor
Saying "i dont wanna live no more"
peolpe try help sometimes
but nothing seems to be fine

you scream i cry
in my head i say why why why
no one knows what happenned to me
even if i screamed every night HELP ME,WHY ME
no one seems to hear me
except the man who i once called daddy
the room unlocks and in he came
he glared around the room to me he aimed
the last thing i heard in my 4 years of life were
BANG BANG BANG

Comments

[Kurai Takehiko]

AWESOM POEM!!!! I CAN REALLY RE-LATE TO THIS POEM.... THIS IS A REALLY GOOD WRITE!!!!

[-FlyingKookie-]

thats good. really good

[randomjoe]

You can't seem to find the tense you want to use in this poem. I find myself distracted by the irregular meter, but if you work on this poem's formatting it could be an interesting work. I am intrigued as to what motivated you to write such a disturbing theme though, 3/5.

[kiwijian_01]

um...sis...wth...where in da world did dat kum frm

[GodsDarkAngel44]

that poem is really deep. it makes me want to cry!! awesome poem