Life

• Artist: HeavenlyXDemonic
• Description: This is about a friend of mine who was abused to death by her father.
• Date: 11/14/2008
• Tags: lifefriendabuse

See the life,
That slips away,
Infront of you,
The pool of blood,
That appears so dark,
The cold hard body,
That stands so still,
A way of life,
That's gone away,
A life so fragile,
wastes away.

Comments

[HeavenlyXDemonic]

thanks guys, i wrote this last year when i was in 8th grade, in my shop class, all i could think about was my friend and that empty seat in my old school that no one else could fill... she was my best friend i just wish i could have done more.

[kerima1510]

Your line endings are a little awkward. Try to make your poems flow,make them feel like putting punctuation in them is wrong and ruins the rythm of. Other than that, its ok.

[kimmico13]

that is good