perfection

• Artist: pepsipoppers
• Description: my friend
  tried to kill herself
  and i wrote this poem for her
• Date: 10/31/2008
• Tags: perfection

sometimes i look in the mirror,
and i wish the person i see
wasnt there
sometimes i wish
i were someone else
if only i were beautiful
if only i was good enough for the world

why do you hate yourself so much?
i like that person you see
she is not ugly
she is not fat
she is a good person
that beats herself up
dont forget
perfection is only a word

Comments

[ChronicOvadose]

To be honest, I don't like it at all. Keep writing.

[Aquilla Claringbold]

I like how in the first stanza you write in one persons perspective then in the second you write another persons, its a creative and very creative, I say 5/5 Bravo *gives a round of applause *

[DiexToxSurvive]

pretty! its beautifully written 4/5

[angstluver]

Very nice. I love it. :3

[loveatfirstnight]

AMAZING!

[Baby Snow Leopard]

Aw I really like it. I love how you said sometimes I look in the mirror and I wish the person I see wasn't there! I really like that line because sometimes I feel like that and that is exactly how I would have described it. Try removing some repeated words because they really are just trivial.