It comes down to this!

• Artist: Mat_Wind and Aura Knight
• Description: I used to have this on my profile, but for some reason, I deleted it.
  
  I don't know if it's poetry, but it's got that kind of feel to it.
• Date: 09/22/2008
• Tags: come down this ultimate battle

The final battle for the universe has come.
The evil lord stands before the young hero, at the center of the cosmos.
The princess joins the hero for for the last bout.
Our hero belongs to the seven attributes: Fire, Water, Earth, Air, Thunder, Dark, and Light.
The princess is bound to him by the mystical balance.

The battle begins as they draw their weapons
The hero, a mighty blade of courage with a magical shield
The princess, a magical bow filled with wisdom and the way of the mystical arts
and the evil overlord, a black sword of power and armor of bloodshed.

The battle rages as an entity of death, a black asteroid, threatens to devour all
that thrives
On their planet, their friends
family, and allies
watch and cheer them on
in hope that they emerge victorious

In desperation, the overlord plots to kill the princess slowly and painfully and tear the hero's heart to shreds.
Her wings open as she takes flight and readies the final blow
He combines his strength with hers and they destroy the overlord
but the battle is not over

The hero calls forth a second sword and opposes the entity
The celestial force of the gods sides with him
as he tries to force the asteroid into oblivion
He is not powerful enough alone
but with the aid of another
they shatter it into the cold abyss
of a black hole

Having saved the universe, he falls to the home planet below
along with the princess
they fall into the ocean
holding each other
they are saved by a light
and awake on the surface

Having seen the hero's actions
the princess falls for him and he promises
never to leave her side.

Comments

[Mat_Wind and Aura Knight]

Meh, it mainly focuses on the battle part. Also, my mom was pestering me to get off the computer, so I had to rush the ending. That, and the story continues in a manga.

[Flint Jakobs]

It really ought to be prose. It reads like a story would, and the line breaks don't change the flow of the work itself. Consider adding more details, especially toward the end, that way the ending doesn't feel so abrupt. Also, you start too many lines off with "The ____", you ought to edit those so that the lines don't feel so choppy and repetitive.