Come Take Me Away

• Artist: xXxDarktearsxXx
• Description: Everyone in the world shares a common theme, whether we like to admit it or not. Everyone has pain and sorrow, in my poems I try to connect to everyone, whether their black, white, male or female. I may do it in a somewhat strange and dark way, but I write from real life and from true emotions, nothing is forced out, it just flows in its own way....
  Well I hope you enjoy, comment if you like and want more.^^
  
• Date: 07/22/2008
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My arms are numb
The color lost
My denial
And my loss

Those dark ruby tears
Which cry from those slits
For the child who is lost
Or the woman who is broken

No more pain
No more tears
These cold days
And those cold years

That darkness
Sweet darkness
You finally came
Come carry me away
Come carry me away

With your sweet voice
And Soft cold touch
Come comfort me
And Take me away
Away from this place
Of darkness and pain.

Comments

[Atheshya]

This is pretty good, though it could be better. While it's well-written and sort of has imagery (note the 'sort of' - if I could truthfully leave those two words out, I'd like this a lot more), it does seem a little... cliched in parts. You should do more, and delve deeper. Get to the heart of what's going on here.

[computercat5]

I love it! It is kind of dark, but the mood matches the words. You're an excellent writer.