I'm Sorry

• Artist: FairyGirl180
• Description: melancholy
  
• Date: 07/21/2008
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As she walks around in an empty paster she finds her self alone with the tears going to her little white pale face. She whispers ever so softly I'm sorry to her mom and to her loved one. That she failed in life. Alls she ever wanted is to be happy and to make others happy. But she let them down. With only sad faces and hurtful tears. She wanted them to believe in her and to love her. Well she knew that her mom loved her. And she knew that her loved one loved her. But to lose everything she had hurts her badly. So she is sorry for letting everyone down. Now alls she has is nothing but lonelyness and sorrow tears. Going down her little white pale face. With the sky going dark the rain clouds come in and starts to rain on the girl so she lays down on the grown. And whispers ever so softly for the last time I'm so sorry. As a tear ruins down her little white pale face.

Comments

[XDIm _A_DorkXD]

becka is so stupid she worries about the commas and other stupid thing she hasn't seen the truely poetic words u have writin truely she cannot see further then her nose

[Isabella_Rikua_McIntyre]

*claps*nice poem

[shard808]

that was great

[maryll24]

love it

[becka321]

DAMN IT!!!!!!!! are you an idiot??????? i'm not even going to read the rest of this because I saw no quotation (" " wink marks around dialogue (when a person speaks). Also never ever (unless it's dialogue), begin a sentance with a conjunction( For, And, Nor, But, Or, Yet, or So.) Don't forget make it so the reader can follow the text. I didn't understand it because, I don't have a clue who is speaking where. If you work on it it can be a convincing and beautiful piece of Literature.

[Enflamed Epnis]

thats really good