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• Artist: HUMIDIFIER
• Description: i don't remember what this is classified as...but poetry is art made of words, either visually or verbally. that's what you keep in mind
  
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• Date: 07/21/2008
• Tags: fire concrete

awayy


drifting
poppg
sparkng
re
fi

fragments remaining
are the these
pit this in
backwards built
cabin this

Comments

[xX_1Soul1_Xx]

this is really great. i thought that the first words are just distracting words but on the second time i read this and i finally got it. 4/5

[Atheshya]

This is cool. It took me a while to figure out to read it, but once I did, it worked. (the last stanza is read 'this cabin built backwards in this pit these are the remaining fragments', right?) I really like poetry like this, the kind that you have to figure out how to read. Four stars (I save 5 stars for the very best - this would likely have gotten them had it been longer) and a favourite.