Verge of Breaking

• Artist: Chocol8Chips
• Description: This is a poem I wrote a few months ago when I was feeling really depressed............
  
• Date: 07/18/2008
• Tags: sadness

Can you tell that I'm crumbling
By looking at me?

I die a little
Every time I put on that smile you see

I veer further away from the road in front
Everyday I wake
Every time I cry

Sure, I smile, laugh
But am I really happy?

Comments

[Crystalinemoon]

Sorray to be the one who critisizez neutral but the third stanza just ..does'nt seem to flow as well as teh rest. But i do like it and i can really relate. Im glad im not the only one.

[staceybritney]

its very good and it shows true emotion

[MalicaNeko93]

Though the message is present, you don't know why it's there and it makes it all the more deeper because everyone who has been down can relate to it....I love it..you get a 5

[WayToDawn94]

its very deep