She Doesn't Know

• Artist: The_Pumpkin_King87
• Description: This is about a girl that I love very much.
• Date: 07/17/2008
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I see her dancing around the street

oh how beautiful she looks, but she doesn't know

oh but she doesnt know

when i look into her eyes, theres more then her disguise

oh oh how elegent she is.

I can't believe this

how am i so lucky,

to have my arms around this angel oh this angel

the smile on her face is no discrase

but the very moment she smiles at me

oh thats all i can see.

Comments

[chelsiebelle]

Why all the oh's? And I agree with vanjoy... it's a sweet poem. You should show it to her! smile 3/5

[Hannah Starz]

I love it. If a boy wrote that to me we would be married by now! ^_^

[vanjoy]

your poem is not bad overall, just make sure that you are only using one tense and do a spell check

that would make it perfect 3.5/5