"Who are you?"

• Artist: La Cerise Noire
• Description: Just something I wrote, well, hope you like!...and Plz comment, so I know where I can make it better!
• Date: 07/15/2008
• Tags: whoareyounaturepeace

As she stepped into the creek,
The creek sang:
"Who are you? Who are you?"
And she replied:
"I am a thinker, coming to enjoy your song."

As she walked under the canopy of emerald,
The trees whispered:
"Who are you? Who are you?"
And she replied:
"I am a dreamer, coming to relax in your shade."

As she walked in the prairie,
The prairie whistled:
"Who are you, Who are you?"
And she replied:
"I am a beleiver, coming to gaze upon your beauty."

As she swam within the sea,
The sea asked:
"Who are you, Who are you?"
And she replied:
"I am a life, coming to bathe in your glory."

Comments

[fireshadowkatdemon]

That's a wonderful poem. Very very nice. 5/5. I really think this is wonderful. Keep writing. ^ ^

[Ellyion-sama]

wow!! if I had enough money I could do poems too!!

[ThA AzN DeViL]

5/5, but i think you coulda used another word for asked in "The sea asked:" Love the last line.

[glowkitty]

That was really pretty. I can't think of any specifics to improve upon.

[Flame_Princess_13]

ooooo
i liked it.