Gone,done.done

• Artist: XoxopupzXoxo
• Description: in a hot day a girl named Jame was alone in the eath will Jame find a person just atlease
• Date: 03/27/2009
• Tags: gonedonedone

on a hot day there is nothing like the old time like go 4 a swimming, visit friends and some other stuff but today it had changed overyone was gone
I had no idea wear the could be xp wear can I find them????
its so boooooooooooring then I started to go crezy A went to the markt place and steal all the stuff then then I keep running I saw the airport good thing I know how to use a jet so I saw a jet And I was thinking to go to Asia but wait a sec I saw a little girl gigling in disapeard then she was right at the back of me
I was thinkin that I mihgt die crying so I ....






I cant think u think

Comments

[Demonic Jester Of Death]

I agree with Chrys. If you're going to submit a story, at least try make sense when ur writing

[CalvinRexx]

Not much punctuation going on and several misspelled words. You also use the number four to replace the word 'for', which is not accepted in writing. You also ignore capitalization. It would help if you made things make a little more sense, as well.

Fixing those few things might make this little story a little better.