Arkarian Seige (Prolog)

• Artist: II Asterban II
• Description: this is the prolog to my book im writing please comment so i can know if need to improve it
• Date: 10/14/2008
• Tags: arkarian seige

In the times of the ancients the world was overthrown by the demon lord "Necros".There only hope lied in a gauntlet of mystic powers, embedded in it were five gems.Along with the advanced technology lost in the war, the glove was the strongest weapon in all of the world!
They needed a man strong enough and wise enough to withhold the power of the gauntlet and not be taken over by greed...The man was found but not named...He was known as the "Savior" but during the battle with Necros all was lost....Necros was sealed back into hell but the gauntlet was thrown into the deepest abyss of hell never to be found again..Until now!

Comments

[OneWithDunamis]

Oh, so Necros comes back with the gauntlet?
Work on grammar. Don't use ... so much, don't use ! so much.
Way too short for a prologue, not much meat in it. It's more like a summary of the beginning than a prologue.
Overall, not very good.

[The Rainy Poet]

epic, but extremely short
needs more details
i think this will turn into a great story with the right stuff

[II Asterban II]

read or die...

[II Asterban II]

ok seriously if you read this please leave a comment i need to know if it needs to be improved and no i wont take advice but i will take criticism no comments will be deleted unless your just being an a**...

[II Asterban II]

im currently working on fixing it up a little bit so yeah....

[II Asterban II]

ok seriously...

[II Asterban II]

i need more comments also whcih direction should i take magic or technology or both? please help