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I thank you all whom have given me opinions and look forward to the possible publication of this story and when [if] that happens i will be sure to give a loaded summary of it here...
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That is way too fast, too brick-like, and yu might want to consider different names. Simmious sounds too much like Simmian, and Zinia looks like an illiterate person tried to spell the name of a semi-well known flower.
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Your summary was pretty confusing, you said so yourself. sad You might want to consider that it is going to be really hard for anyone to read something that you've written if you don't work on making your ideas more clear.
It's easy to see that you have a lot of enthusiasm and ideas, which is great, because it will help you get started and get past writers block. But the organization of your thoughts is not as apparent to readers as it is to you in your head, and working on getting them to understand your vision is the craft of writing. |
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I think it sounds interesting...well, as much as I could make from that anyways lol.
You need to make that summary less confusing. From what I've gathered, it seems a bit...predictable...but with some unique quirks. xD I think, if you want to write something, write it. Don't worry about whether it will sell or be read by others. Just do it. Stephanie Meyer-although I'm not a big fan of hers- wrote a book based on a dream of sorts. She didn't expect it to sell so well, nor did she expect the main audience to be teenaged girls. She just wrote what came to her. And look where she is now xD famous and rich and beloved by most the world. I'm not saying you could be the next Meyer. My point is, you should write it. xD And good luck! |
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Stephanie Meyer was also published purely on pity by her friend and it shows. Whether you like her stuff or not, that's not how people should get published.
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i second that! (it was definately comfusing.) lol gud luck
i_LoVe_DaFt_PuNk I think it sounds interesting...well, as much as I could make from that anyways lol. You need to make that summary less confusing. From what I've gathered, it seems a bit...predictable...but with some unique quirks. xD I think, if you want to write something, write it. Don't worry about whether it will sell or be read by others. Just do it. Stephanie Meyer-although I'm not a big fan of hers- wrote a book based on a dream of sorts. She didn't expect it to sell so well, nor did she expect the main audience to be teenaged girls. She just wrote what came to her. And look where she is now xD famous and rich and beloved by most the world. I'm not saying you could be the next Meyer. My point is, you should write it. xD And good luck! |
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Your point is a broken Aesop, that's what I'm saying.
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I_Write_Ivre Stephanie Meyer was also published purely on pity by her friend and it shows. Whether you like her stuff or not, that's not how people should get published. I agree. Stephnie Meyer can't write to save her life. Oh. And about your brief summary. I can't really judge until you develop a complete story. I was a co-writer for a PC video game, and there is a lot of outlining work to be done before you even establish character names fully, and things change. Keep trying and don't give up. Although your book sounds vaguely familiar to a game I've played called: Hoshigami Remix. |
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I_Write_Ivre Stephanie Meyer was also published purely on pity by her friend and it shows. Whether you like her stuff or not, that's not how people should get published. lol I wasn't aware of that. |
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for the most part, I like the names of the people. Spikes throws me off though. The "s" at the end trips me up, doesn't fit quite right...and Muolly makes me think of a cow...I'm not sure why...maybe I'm pernouncing it wrong lol.
Oh and as for your name and the typo thing...you can change your gaia name up to two times for free...then after that you have to pay 10k I believe...but if you'd like to fix the error in your name's spelling, you should be able to do it, unless you've edited it already two times before... |
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I didn't have any problem figuring out the plot. The idea could be good it depends on how you develop it. Personally I don't care for the names much. They are to complex and it could distract the reader from the story.
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Distress-Chan I_Write_Ivre Stephanie Meyer was also published purely on pity by her friend and it shows. Whether you like her stuff or not, that's not how people should get published. I agree. Stephnie Meyer can't write to save her life. Oh. And about your brief summary. I can't really judge until you develop a complete story. I was a co-writer for a PC video game, and there is a lot of outlining work to be done before you even establish character names fully, and things change. Keep trying and don't give up. Although your book sounds vaguely familiar to a game I've played called: Hoshigami Remix. lol yeah I noticed that the summary is quiet confusing but i've had people read the transcript (or at least what there is so far) and they didn't think it confusing. Perhaps i should clarify the summary. Oh and I'm sure it might sound like something after all "it's nearly impossible to be a pioneer today because there most likely hasn't been one thought in all of our pretty little heads that hasn't been thought of at least once before us." ~ My algebra teacher from last year. but there is a massive twist, well maybe not...(you know about it about a chapter before it happens) that takes it to something else. trust me what i have put out for people to see is only the mere beginning. fact is that covers about...four chapter i think? where as i have about 7 typed out. |
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I_Write_Ivre That is way too fast, too brick-like, and yu might want to consider different names. Simmious sounds too much like Simmian, and Zinia looks like an illiterate person tried to spell the name of a semi-well known flower. I know that Zinia is a miss spelling of the flower. the reason i named her that is because a teacher of mine, when i was very little, only had zinnias in her garden. It's sort of suppose to be a secret but seeing as you asked i suppose it won't kill any one to know. and (i found the right spelling I'll be fixing it in a moment.) Semmios, his name is made of Semi and a Greek character Minos. and that's the summary yeah it moves fast because every sentence covers possibly one and a half of each chapter but I was some what afraid my story might be moving a bit fast glad some one possibly noticed. |
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aylianna I didn't have any problem figuring out the plot. The idea could be good it depends on how you develop it. Personally I don't care for the names much. They are to complex and it could distract the reader from the story. Eh, you have a point. perhaps in the back of the book,if it is ever published, i should make a key so that people came turn to it when they don't know how to pronounce the names. lol |
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Semmios sounds fine. I think Zinia needs another N.
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