Erik 3

• Artist: StormCloud914
• Description: I thought this was the best part of the story... Well, not really cuz I ain't finished yet. Be sure to read parts uno and... two b4 comment that u don't get da story. Couldn't finish...
• Date: 12/23/2008
• Tags: erik

There was nothing else to do. Ice had replaced my heart. Love was dangerous; life was dangerous. I climbed down from the huge, protective tree. My face was stained with tears from my hysterics before. I felt the harsh emptiness that I hadn't felt for a long time. Not since before I met Erik. While we were together he made me feel... bubbly inside. He gave me the love I never got from my family, no matter how hard I tried to get it from them. Erik let me cry on his shoulder; he hugged me and was a safe place from the bitterness of my life. Nothing mattered but being with him and the joy I derived from it. The, he took my heart and threw it away. He cut it into a million tiny pieces and burned them to a crisp.

But I'm still alive. Just clinging to the sliver of life I had left.

Comments

[Demon_Saya]

The writing isn't bad. It IS, however, very short. I have no idea how long this is supposed to be, but even for a short story, this seems short. If you're having trouble writing this, I recommend getting a beta, because they not only check your grammar and word choices, they can also knock ideas around with you about places which could use improvement. I don't know what I'd do without mine.

[dark_moonlight_girl321]

its good so far i think
you should write about how erik broke up with her
and give her a name
1 more thing
you should write about how she moves on without him